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bicycle作者的思路是清晰的,但表達不明確,所以造成結構混亂的感覺,考試時會吃虧的。
下面就是這兩篇文章。
Bicycles have become more and more popular in China. People ride bikes to their work places, to shopping areas, to schools, and so on. During the rush hours, you can often see a boiling sea of bicycles running in all directions. With the largest number of bike riders in the world, China is often referred to as the kingdom of bicycles.?
Compared with cars, bikes have many advantages(這應該是主題句,在這么短的文章里應該放在第一段). First, they are not very expensive, and almost every family can afford them. (這句話分成2個句子比較好,一句是key point,一句做進一步解釋)Second, they are very handy and convenient though they are not so fast as cars. With a bike, you can go anywhere you like, and you dont have to look for a large parking place. By riding bikes, you can avoid traffic jams and thus save the time and the money for taking taxis(同第一點一樣,但這一點思路有些亂). Third, they do not cause air or sound pollution(?? Riding bikes does good to your health if you ride it regularly(這應該是文章要論述的第四點,但沒有連接詞,又分了段,打亂了文章的整體結構). In modern times, people are usually too busy to spare any time for physical exercise. Riding a bike to your work place regularly serves as a good way to keep yourself strong and healthy. (2個句子的順序換一下比較好。因為前面已經說了有益于健康,讀者等著聽解釋,但作者卻換了話題。第一句話應該是第二句話的原因。)?
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